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So, a few of my friends and I have teamed up, and thought ahead. We want to make a complete RPG game (in old-school 8-bit style of course)
So, the hardest (and most important) part of making an RPG is coming up with a good story line. So over the next year or so, we are working of coming up with the complete storyline, so that we have a full year for sprite drawings, and programming and such.
Well, I came up with my first lame attempt at a story line, and thought I'd bounce it off you guys to see what kind of reaction I get. I realize it's a first try, and it might not be good. If you really hate it, make sure you really bash it. I'm an idiot, and If you just toss white-lies at me to make me feel better, a sucky story will end up behind the game. Pretend this RPG will be targeted for the entire game buying community. I need to impress. I want people to play it.
Ok, enough of my rambling, lets get to the story:
opens to a burning city, you are a young lost boy, trying to get home. You see odd
shaped beings running about, torching the city and killing it's citizens.
You now control the boy and run through the collapsing city and ward off warriors
(with no sort of weapons, your only a young boy! :)) who seem to be chasing you,
to arrive home.
When you arrive at home you are graiously recieved by your mother. You find out
via dialogue that a war has reached it's climax and the largest, and last
remaining city of an ancient civilazion is being destroyed by a legion of beings
in search of some said ultimate power source, that powers this ancient
civilization that is about to meet it's doom.
A woman wraps a strangly irridescant item in a cloth and hands it to the young
child, along with a backpack of supplies and a crude sword his father had left for
him in the time of his death. She then commands that he escapes from the burning
city and takes the wrapped item to a safe place on a said island where it can be
recovered at a later date. The boy runs from his home out a back door.
You now control the boy and run from your home and head for the river where you
will make your escape. Many warriors chase you, and you fight them off as you
can.
As soon as you reach the river, an arrow flies from behind you, fired by one of
the soldiers, you trip and you lose your wrapped item into the deep river just
ahead of you. After the kill, the soldiers raid your backpack and take your sword.
The legions of warriors then finish off the total annhilation of the entire city,
the last of the ancient people.
over 18000 years later, in the city of New York, the year is 1812. You are
introduced to a young professor in the studies of physcology, and the power of the
mind. In his spare time, he is studies the paranormal, and quite strongly believes
that there is an afterlife, and that the disrupted remain on earth, in the form of
a ghost. Everyone thinks he is a looney. He finds that he has been invited on a
tour and inspection of a so said haunted city in north russia with a few other
experts on the paranormal.
You arrive in northern russia, and meet your friends, and you talk over dinner,
you discover that the abandoned city was thought to be the home site of a
civilization that had been only heard of before in ancient myths, and that the
entire civilization was completly wiped out in a single war, leaving nothing to
study. The other men sound very excited to hope to learn more of these myths from
investigating the area, and hopefully experiencing some paranormal experience.
The next day you awake to see a young boy sitting in your reading chair, staring
blankly at you, he says only one phrase: 'help me'. Just then one of your friends
opens the door to see if you are awake, and turns on the light. When he turns on
the light, the boy is nowhere to be seen.
As you investigate the ancient lands, you have a re-accuring dream of the burning
of the ancient city. You learn from these dreams of a type of crystal that gives
off an energy flow while remaining cool, that would last for a very long time.
This crystal was once abundant to this land, but most of it was destroyed by the
wars, and the last of it was lost.
You find it as your own personal quest to retrive the crystal, and learn from your
reacurring dreams where to look.
Once found, you share the discovery with the world. The world begins to use the
new highly efficent power source, and you are renouned for it.
Of course, this is when the bag guys come in. The legions that destroyed the
ancient civilization begin to show up, and the earth must fight to survive. You
are elected as a leader of a group that will fight the legions, and learn from the
ghosts of the ancients on how to defeat them.
Hopefully, you save the world from ultimate destruction.
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How was it? seriously, praise the good parts, bash the bad, and most of all, tell me what you would do to improve apon it.
If it helps any, we are expecting to have about 5 hours of completed gameplay, so the story cant be TOO long.
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